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                                                    Not Now
Gai sat at the edge of the hospital bed glancing down at his young student that was sleeping soundly. Gai let out a sigh as he recalled the fight between Lee and the sand Nin named Gaara.

~flashback~
   Gai felt his heart almost break as he heard his students cry as his left arm and leg where crushed by sand. He couldn’t believe his eyes Lee used his strongest attack and yet the sand Nin still had energy to fight. Seeing lees unconscious form being surrounded by sand Gai jumped to save him afraid for a moment for his student’s life not wanting him to be killed at this point after all the blood sweat and tears not now…
~End flashback~

Feeling tears form at the corners of his eyes for the second time that day not wanting his student to wake up and see his tears Gai swiftly wiped them away Looking down at lee one last time before getting up to leave for the night. Days had passed as Lee was in the hospital and every day Gai would come to see if his precious student was awake and every day it was the same. Gai would sit in the hospital room waiting and hoping to see Lees bright eyes open once again …



**fixed it :P**
©2006-2009 ~CatNipped
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:iconsallychan:
D; how sad

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Tea?:tea:
:iconcatnipped:
i know ;_;

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i :heart: ガイ x リー and many Peoples <w<
:iconkittyluvstorave:
awww... ;_; really good! nice job author!

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Hated by many, respected by all
Any of ya girls love Gaara and Rock Lee?
you jus made my list......XD
prepare to be stuffed with toothpaste!
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;_; thank you

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i :heart: ガイ x リー and many Peoples <w<
:iconireireire:
I enjoied it very much ^^ I love sad stories, and yours is very sad yet so sweet! Short and essential, very good: I can't write one-shots even if I try...
Moreover, the hospital-thing offers lots of shonen-ai points, I think... ^^ I wish I could write an english gailee too...

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"sit yer ass down in th' chair and drink yer %$@&# damn tea!"
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:iconnocturnal-albino:
That puts a heartbreaking image in my head ;__; The man must've been completely devastated the first few days/weeks.

The story is short, yet effective and full of emotion. One thing it seems to lack, though, is commas. I couldn't see a single comma in the whole text, but maybe that was intended? Also a few spelling mistakes but I would hate to start to pick on people because they misspelled a word here or there.

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noc, noc. who's there? >D
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:heart: thank you ya i was thinking about adding a little shonen-ai but im not good at writing storys like that and this just came in to my head one day and i put it down on paper i really didnt think it was that good so ya and im so glad that you like it :heart: X3

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i :heart: ガイ x リー and many Peoples <w<
:iconcatnipped:
^^; ya about the commas and all that im not that good at writing storys see this was my first fan-fic kinda story and can you please tell me where the spelling mistakes are if you dont mind :heart: and thank you for commenting on it X3

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i :heart: ガイ x リー and many Peoples <w<

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